Sorry for the late update but things were a bit ugly here with various stuff popping out of nowhere and my hard drive crash and other -annoying- little details that I won’t bother you with.
I’ve managed to post a new chapter for ‘The soul of Charoden‘ although I think that I’ll have to check it again tomorrow for further proofreading and general editing.
Unfortunately the chapter of ‘What lies unborn‘ has been delayed enough that I’ve reached the next publication date, meaning that in actuality I’ve missed an update altogether… that would be my first one 😦 .
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So many things right now to tell that I don’t know from where to begin…
I guess from the start?
I had a planned update for ‘What lies Unborn’ for today, unfortunately this isn’t going to happen for multiple reasons.
First of all, there were some changes in my work schedule today. The good news is that I’m going to actually work less hours, thus giving me more free time to write, the bad news are that until my program fully adapt to this new schedule I’m kinda in the dark regarding when I will have free time to write in the middle of the week (weekends are free so there is no problem there).
Secondly, I got a really bad review for this place and for What Lies unborn. It didn’t piss me off, on the contrary it made me think. This story has started as an experiment from me, I guess this is obvious from the way it is actually written. I really liked the story and where it was going, but from the lack of responses and the bad review I guess it’s not as ‘nice’ as I thought. So, instead of focusing solely on this story I have decided to start again ‘Crescendo’.
But the reason is not only so that I would have something else except What lies Unborn. Crescendo is a ‘normal’ fantasy story, no experimentation, no weird tenses, no weird format. I want to believe that I improve as I write, so this will give me an opportunity to strengthen my writing enough to succeed at what I tried to achieve in ‘What lies Unborn’ at the first place.
On to other matters. There was a massive wipe here. ‘Without a word’ got deleted and so did the ‘removed’ stories. The first one was due to the quality. It was severely lacking, it was a short story of ~1000 words that didn’t manage to communicate what it was about. The ‘removed’ stories got the boot because they had to. I’ve decided to let in this blog only the short stories that I really think that are good so as not to blemish the general appearance of this place.
If you noticed above, I said short stories. Yes, serials and longer novels are cumbersome with pages. I was told that after I had almost half their chapters in pages already. When I started this blog I knew nothing of blogging, I knew nothing of rss, I knew nothing of accessibility, and the main reason I wrote what I wrote was just for the act of it, never expecting traffic. Now that I know that posts are better, I thought about trying that. In order to have each story in a more ‘suitable’ background, I decided to start each one of them in separate blogs. The truth is that I was already doing that for ‘What lies unborn’ and I was pleased with the outcome. So, now that I start anew Crescendo I decided to do so again.
What was really tiring though was the editing of 3 blogs, 1 for the pages here, 1 for the blog itself, 1 for my backup. So to avoid that, and to avoid duplicate material, I’m removing the pages from here.
Now that I remembered… Crescendo is no longer called as such, but ‘Soul of Charoden’
If you had been to the main crescendo page those last three days you you have seen a warning by me. It was speaking of grammar errors and slight typos that irritated me and I wanted to have them removed. Today I fixed the first 3 chapters and they are in their new address. Tomorrow, if I find the time I will add the next two chapters, and after that I will update normally. You may wonder why I’ve split the chapters into parts. I want to see if I can manage 3 updates per week if I make them somewhat smaller. We’ll see how this will work on time.
I’m sure there is something tht I’m forgetting here… but I guess that if I remember it on time, I can just edit.
-Phoenix fades into his shroud
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As I have told you, I was in a pretty bad mood yesterday. Well, I slept for a good ten hours awakening in a ridiculously late hour 😀 and then the day began…
I made three cupboards and one bookcase from scratch, I emptied (alongside my father) a whole storage for a shop, built up shelves on the spot, and re-moved all the stuff in again. A fine way to pass up a Sunday ^^. My hands kinda hurt, my back definitely hurts, and I’m officially beat. Add to that that some few days ago I was helping in a moving in, I can easily say that those days were some of my most physical active this last six months…
But you know what they say about physical activity… it has that unique ability to take everything out of your mind and -plop- into the drain. Whatever troubles were messing with my head yesterday -poof- they are gone. And finally, now, at 8:30 here, I can start on finishing chapter 9 of ‘What lies Unborn’. Thankfully, it will take less than three hours to finish, edit and post it, and this will mean that it will be my 3rd week on the row, that not only I haven’t missed a planned update, but I’ve actually managed to pull off 2 updates per week.
Now, excuse me, I have to actually start writing. I’ll edit this post when I actually post the chapter.
-Phoenix runs back to his Shroud.
Edit: Hah, despite an abrupt stop for dinner, I actually made it. Chapter 9 of What lies unborn delivered at 23:10. It came out quite big too, almost as long as chapter 8, and is starting to ‘spice up’ the convenient (well, not so conveniant, but you get me^^) life of the MC. And it’s time for Maria to start to shine in!
A quick thing, if you haven’t noticed it yet, and you’re fans of rss feeds, you can always go HERE to find the whole story in post format.
Enjoy.
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Yay, here we go again changing subjects!
As always my mind drifted to a new story! And that’s the reason that I didn’t want to post the 1st chapter of the one that I had began some days ago.
I fought and fought with my urges, and finally I had them subdued though. I forced myself to not start a new story, but instead edit one of the removed ones that matched its theme (horror, dark, modern supernatural). So I started the long procedure of editing ‘Lurking shadows’. What I wanted? Less gore, more horror. I ended up cutting the chapters to smaller bits too, making them small and easy to read. So far, the first 5 chapters are ready (what was originally the first 3 chapters). Gore is still there, but far less than before, and I hope that I’ve actually managed to add some more suspense. It’s still not available though. I want to edit the whole thing (that is about two times more of what I’ve edited, but what remains is the actual ‘hard’ part to edit) because I’m afraid that I just won’t get it exactly right.
Of course, since I so totally hate editing, that was as far as I could go for the day (or for the week as far as I’m concerned). And started doing something else:
I started working on chapter 9 of ‘What lies unborn’. As I’ve explained, this Friday and Saturday I will be missing and (due to some things that I don’t fully understand) I’ll have to help my brother move to a new house not today as I thought, but tomorrow. This means that the weekend update will not be ready by Saturday as usual, but I think that I’m still in my mark to deliver it on Sunday afternoon. I’m halfway done with it anyways, so that means just one to two more hours of work (including the editing) to finish it. So, see you on Sunday.
-Phoenix backtracks to his shroud
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Chapter VIII, bonus chapter for the week (since I’m still trying to see if I can handle two steady chapters per week) is ready and posted.
Finally, we get to see some action in this one, and some ass-kicking-Liz.
Also our poor MC finally has some crazed antagonists on the loose.
The good news is that this chapter is pretty big, enough I hope to satisfy your curiosity until the weekend.
The bad news are that, starting tomorrow, I’m helping my brother move to his new house, and immidiatly after that, I’m leaving town till Saturday night.
I’ll try to write the weekend chapter sometime before Thursday night that I’m leaving, so that I can post it on Sunday morning. If this plan fails due to the moving, then I’ll try to write it on Sunday… if even this fails, then I guess I’ll have to hang myself to post the weekend chapter at Monday.
p.s. Also Chapter I of my new story is ready and edited too, but I will withhold it. The reason for this being that a)to not clatter the site with unfinished stories that won’t continue anytime soon, b)to see if the mood to continue it at all comes over me again, and c)since it is something different (as I’ve told you yesterday) I’m still not quite sure if I like it…
-Phoenix retreats back to his shroud
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In between a canceled rp session and some beers, I managed to find some free time. I decided to dedicate it to writing, but since I’ve already written about 1+ 1/2 chapter of what lies unborn yesterday I wanted to occupy myself with something different.
So, I started an idea that lingered in my mind for a while now. I’ve written already the first chapter, but it is a style that I’ve never tried before, lighter and more ‘traditional’, and so I will give myself some more time to edit it before I post it.
To add to this, I re-looked a bit ‘What lies Unborn‘. It seems that many readers have slowly stepped away the moment they saw the format of the first paragraph… As I writer, I cannot understand this completely. That is because I know what will happen, and I know why it is formatted this way. But I think, that I can sympathize with a first time reader that stumbles upon such random sentences that are supposed to be the beginning of a novel. And thus, I’ve added a small prologue, maybe 1-2 paragraphs of normalized text to ease the mind of the reader and prepare him for what is to follow.
I would greatly love to hear some input of what you think about those paragraphs since it is a major edit on my part (it basically changed the format of the beginning).
-Phoenix steps back to his shroud
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As you understand, for practical reasons I decided to move the blog here. I hope that this doesn’t inconvenience you a lot.
We’re not talking about a simple revival here. A whole new being is being born, Shroudphoenix, the child of shadowphoenix is getting ready to open his wings and fly away from his old self, hence the name change of the blog.
On an unrelated topic, since I started posting to begin with, I think I’ve managed to squeeze some free time to update “What Lies Unborn” tomorrow. If I can keep up this schedule, I might pull it through to get two regular updates per week, but this is just too hazy for now.
(And obviously I had to just make a post to see if everything works as intended)
-Phoenix steps back into the shroud
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I begin the ‘promised’ weekly updates on ‘What lies Unborn’. I didn’t even think that it would be possible to make it on Saturday night… Luckily my exodus has been somewhat delayed, and so Chapter V came to fruition.
I realize the good things of scheduled updates. It gave me enough motivation to sit and write… now if only this didn’t actually mean that I just sat and wrote this piece at the (nearly) last moment. Heh, if it is riddled with typos then you know whom to blame…
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It seems procrastination is my calling. I wonder why when i have a ton of stuff to do piled up, I leave them as they are and start writing…
Oh well, couldn’t do something different though.
As i was sorting some things from my childhood, a small notebook fell. A tiny bluish (at sometime) notebook. I had it bought when i was seven, eight years old, can’t really remember. But I had it so that I could note down lyrics that I liked. My parents loved the idea since they thought that it would help me with my spelling (which by the way still sucks). Soon I began to alter the words here or there. Putting them in different order, giving them life… It didn’t took much for this tiny assembly of magical papers to become my very first place that I stored my poems. Childish, now that i see them, ignorant of life… yet, somehow, I couldn’t contain my tears when I read, and re-read them…
Obviously, I dedicate the poem: Reminiscence to it… and since it got me writing again, I finished my story Incineration of sanity. It felt nice to finish a story in just two days… maybe I should stick to short ones.
If you read it and wonder about the ‘somewhat’ abrupt ending, it was intentional. Life can change in the blink of an eye, in the second that it takes for one to make the decision to alter it… I don’t know how well it shows that it was intentional, but I hope…
Reminiscence
A tear stains, your worn teal color.
Blue ink is messing your scrambled lines.
Notebook of old, where were you hiding?
Your pages so thin, they’ve sliced my soul.
Were you just hiding in dusty corner?
Or in my heart you always lay?
Memories dance and sobs explode,
as I am holding you in my hand.
Meaningless rhymes and silly lyrics
How my emotions you mess?
Childish scribbles in playful tunes
How tears you bring in clouded mind?
Do you remember our first caress?
Your lover’s dance with pen and pencil?
My smile when loneliness you did dispel.
The day I bought you, I bought a friend…
A dozen years, maybe some more,
have passed since then that we had bond.
Yet fragrance fresh you still emit
of words you spat, of life you’ve birthed..
Notebook of old, now that I’ve found you,
my pillow join, there where I lay,
I’ll trust you again, my dreams to guard;
the same old dreams that you’ve inspired…
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So, I kinda-sorta-somewhat found a little free time to continue my writing. Nothing much, just a few steps to make me moving again. As in my classic stupid tradition, I didn’t continued any of my previous work that I so much wish to finish some day… but i started on new projects.
And here I go again, in a new place ( http://Writing.Com/authors/shphoenixgr), making a fresh start. The problem is (why there should always be one by the way?…) that at this particular moment, i have a chance to do something really meaningful with my life… and here I am wasting my time writing things irrelevant to my work… but this doesn’t bother me now. I figure that I like my writing better than my job anyways…
So I wrote a poem for my new beginning, a poem about life, since it IS a good subject for my baby steps…
I also started writing a small story for a contest there, the poem (Full circle) as well as the story (Incineration of sanity) can be found (as always) in the sidebar. And to continue my new test, I shall put the poem here too.
Hope you’ll enjoy them both.
Full circle
You’re slapped to life by tender hand,
to learn the meaning of pain and love.
Opposite sides, or are they really?
When things you learn, shouldn’t you dance?
For times will come where fate is cruel.
Your sorrows grasp, your bitter paths.
Embrace your tears, forget your past,
for only struggle teach how to laugh.
But when life shines, they rays of joy,
always remember to smile with your eyes.
For truly as sun, in mirrored glass,
your light reflects and spreads your laugh.
And morning come, and evening leave,
learn something new, teach something different.
The things you treasure must go to others,
and you’re expected to guard their own.
But always take notice, that this’ a journey,
a train of memories and things you’ve done.
And it’s better to be a cabin active,
than just a passenger that watch life pass.
And when they say ‘Your light is dimming’,
over your shoulder just throw a glimpse.
You’ll see it bright, to those you gave it,
to those you taught and those you smiled.
Your head turn straight and silently walk,
you’re finally here, to your journey’s last stop.
The times you’ve fallen are long now past,
Be proud you willed yourself to stand up.
But if you think you need more time,
you have forgotten one major thing.
You need to cry to learn how to laugh,
how can you live if you cannot die?
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